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Any volunteers to read for me?
By Louisemember has saluted, click to view salute photosPremium member Comments: 17315, member since Thu Jun 06, 2002
On Fri Sep 07, 2012 04:07 AM
Edited by Louise (29559) on 2012-09-07 05:22:29

I have a post further down the board about writing for older kids, but it's too old to reply too unfortunately. That tells you how long I've been sitting on these chapters!

I started off a piece of writing way back when, kinda forgot about it, and haven't looked at it since. I think I was expecting it to be rubbish. Anyway I looked at it again today, and it's actually not as bad as I thought it would be. I'd like to pick it back up again, if I can find the notebook that's going to remind me what the next few chapters were all about.

Would anybody have a few minutes available to have a read of it and let me know what they think? It's literally three chapters so it won't take long.

It's about Irish dancing, but you really don't need any knowledge of that to let me know whether it's crap or not... :P

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re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By ChristinePremium member Comments: 6817, member since Wed Feb 04, 2009
On Fri Sep 07, 2012 01:12 PM
Me, me, me!

Keep On Dancing*
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By LlamaLlamaDuckmember has saluted, click to view salute photosPremium member Comments: 7765, member since Sun Nov 21, 2004
On Fri Sep 07, 2012 01:42 PM
I'll give it a read too
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By lux Comments: 1178, member since Mon Jun 02, 2008
On Fri Sep 07, 2012 01:45 PM
Ooh, me!
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By Louisemember has saluted, click to view salute photosPremium member Comments: 17315, member since Thu Jun 06, 2002
On Fri Sep 07, 2012 02:42 PM
Thanks people :)

I'll PM it to you all later, unless it's too long, in which case I'll have to ask for email addresses. Either way, look out for the yellow bar!
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By Sumayah Comments: 6876, member since Wed Nov 12, 2008
On Fri Sep 07, 2012 02:42 PM
Me!
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By Cheesemoo Comments: 639, member since Mon Jun 23, 2008
On Sat Sep 08, 2012 04:20 AM
I'd be happy to read it!
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By balletgirl4ever Comments: 535, member since Tue Jul 31, 2012
On Sat Sep 08, 2012 07:49 AM
Ill read it happily Lousie! I've written a book too so I know what Im talking about. I might get you guys to read a bit of mine too!
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By chrispbinmember has saluted, click to view salute photosPremium member Comments: 2188, member since Sat May 06, 2006
On Sat Sep 08, 2012 11:19 AM
Do you need another reader? I'm an avid reader, grammar nazi, and teacher, if that helps? Or maybe it'll scare you off?
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By schuhplattlerPremium member Comments: 3037, member since Sat Dec 23, 2006
On Sat Sep 08, 2012 02:00 PM
Me - I make my living as a technical writer, including lots of proofreading.
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By irishgirl26member has saluted, click to view salute photos Comments: 429, member since Sun Sep 07, 2008
On Sat Sep 08, 2012 02:09 PM
I'd love to read it!
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By Louisemember has saluted, click to view salute photosPremium member Comments: 17315, member since Thu Jun 06, 2002
On Sat Sep 08, 2012 04:05 PM
Thanks guys - I'm away from home tonight so I can't send it to anyone who's posted today. I've sent it to the first 4 posters so I might leave it there, we'll see. Thanks all - no more volunteers needed.
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By lux Comments: 1178, member since Mon Jun 02, 2008
On Sat Sep 08, 2012 10:52 PM
Got it! I'll get back to you as soon as I can, looking forward to reading it :)
re: Any volunteers to read for me?
By ChristinePremium member Comments: 6817, member since Wed Feb 04, 2009
On Tue Sep 11, 2012 06:47 PM
Well Doll... you've done it again!

Excellent work.

The driving force in fiction, especially YA ... is conflict, and you have already engaged the reader (me, in this case) in the main character's emotions. The details of ID are also engaging, although I know next to nothing about the genre. I am already curious about the main character's appearance, her dress, her shoes, etc. It makes it easier to stay fixed in "the fictional dream" (a term stolen from John Gardner)if there is a specific visual image, formed by a collection of vivid details. You already know, and demonstrate, most of what he has to say to new writers, but perhaps this may have a gem or two for you.
ebookbrowse.com . . .

I look forward to the rest. Are you thinking novel, or short story, or someplace in between?

Thanks for sharing.

Keep On Dancing*

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